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You spend your time,
Standing and waiting,
For the end result.

From the age of infancy,
Until you become
An adult.

As you will see,
Being me,
Is not so easy.

Dreams can be swept away,
In just one day,
Patience begins to fray.

When it comes down to it,
What were we
Really waiting for?

These numbers and letters;
They keep
Your emotions raw.

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:iconxdreamers-faytx:
Driven by despondent rains so dissimilar calmed by minute resonance crowding the eternal eventide sky.
We search desperately in the fog of quiescence, leaving behind at every turn the final sanctuary remaining shy of nigh.
Marooned of rebirth.
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:iconyourpleasantdarkness:
:) Simplistic and absolutely lovely.

-A.C.
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:iconwhydoidothiseveryday:
thanks and for the fave :)
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:iconleoraigarath:
`leoraigarath Aug 16, 2008  Professional Writer
I think that this poem is great on many ways, especially the wording – I really like the words you chose and the way they relate. But I have to say that the line breaking made me frown. I think that this poem can flow so much better, and be stronger. Let me show you a little example on the first stanza:

You spend your time standing,
waiting,
For the end result.


I think and feel there’s still some work to be done on this poem, but it is well worth the effort. Let me know if you are planning on editing this one, I would really love to see the result!
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:iconwhydoidothiseveryday:
:) thanks for the comments
x
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:iconsepter:
luv the 4th and 5th stanza its great and i think its a poem that can realte with everyone nicely done :)
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